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Writing First-Person POV Stories: Tips for Authenticity

By Jennifer Braddock – Editor

In first-person storytelling, dialogue is never neutral. It’s a recounting of memories and is shaped by the narrator’s memory and interpretation of the exchange. For example:

“We’ll see your Papa soon,” Mama said, not looking up from her knitting.

She always had that unemotional tone when she was nervous. I was just a kid when he was arrested by the FBI. I didn’t know what was happening.

Dialogue becomes an opportunity to show character, subtext, and tension, not just deliver facts.

Use these techniques to strengthen first-person dialogue:

  • Narrator’s observations: “You’re going like that?” she asked. I looked down at my shirt. Plain gray. A coffee stain near the hem.
  • Internal thoughts between lines: “No reason,” she said. Her smile didn’t match her eyes.
  • Nonverbal cues: She tapped her nails on the table. I braced for a question I didn’t want to answer.

Weak vs. Strong First-Person Dialogue Example

Weak:

“I don’t want to go,” I said.
“Why not?” she asked.
“Because I don’t feel like it,” I said.
“Fine. Stay here,” she said.

Strong:

“I don’t want to go,” I said, not meeting her eyes.

“Why not?” she asked, arms folded like a parent catching a lie.

“I just… don’t feel like it,” I shrugged.

“Fine. Stay here.” Her mouth tightened.

She didn’t slam the door, but she might as well have.

The second version shows emotion, body language, and subtext from the narrator’s perspective. This lets the reader experience the tension instead of simply reading about it.

How Can a First-Person Narrator Know About Events They Didn’t Witness?

One common question about first-person writing is: How do I show something the narrator didn’t see? Here are five ways to handle this while staying true to first-person limits:

  • Dialogue: Another character tells the narrator what happened. “My mom told me he didn’t even cry at the funeral,” she said.
  • Discovery: The narrator reads a letter, watches a video, or finds an object. I unfolded the note. Just six words: “I tried. You never saw me.”
  • Rumors or Secondhand Info: Let the narrator hear it from someone else. Everyone said Mark was the last to see her. No one knew what they talked about.
  • Dreams or Flashbacks (used carefully): These work when grounded in the narrator’s memory or subconscious. They should not be used as a lazy plot device.
  • Imaginative speculation (with voice): The narrator may guess what happened, or misremember it entirely. This can lead to compelling, unreliable narration.

Final Thoughts

First-person writing is more than choosing a point of view. It’s choosing a relationship with the reader. When done right, it feels like confession, conversation, and story all at once.

It’s the voice that says:
“Let me tell you what really happened…”

Action to Experiment

Try rewriting a scene from your work-in-progress in first person. What does the character notice that a distant narrator wouldn’t? What do they leave out? How do they color the truth? Your character already has a story to tell. Let them tell it.

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“I opened the door and everything changed.”

That’s the power of first-person POV: raw, intimate, and immediate. But how do you show what your narrator didn’t see? How do you balance showing and telling?

🎯 This week’s post breaks it down:

  • The show vs. tell sweet spot
  • Writing real, revealing dialogue
  • How to handle scenes the narrator missed
  • Reviews of two standout first-person novels

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Third-Person Omniscient POV: The Day the Fence Took Everything

A reflection on truth, memory, and the power of third-person omniscient narration

By Jennifer Braddock – Editor

Ever wanted to play god without the responsibility of smiting anyone? Welcome to third-person omniscient, where you know everything, see everything, and judge nothing. This is the narrative voice that floats above your characters. Before you put on your all-seeing narrator hat, let’s discuss the what, why, and how.

Third-Person Omniscient Traits and Boundaries

Why tell this story through the eyes of many? Because stories like the one about Camp Arroyo aren’t just about individuals. They’re about a system. A society. A truth that implicates everyone.

From this point of view, the narrator is not a character in the story. Instead, they’re an all-knowing presence who can dip into any character’s thoughts, emotions, memories, or future dreams, and offer commentary.

  • You know everyone’s thoughts, but don’t share them all at once. Pick your spots. Otherwise, it’s emotional whiplash.
  • The narrator has a tone. Even if it’s not a character, the voice telling the story has a personality: wry, wise, ironic, or lyrical.
  • You can zoom in and out, but do so smoothly. Think of it like directing a movie: wide shots for scene-setting, close-ups for emotion.
  • Avoid ‘head-hopping’ mid-paragraph. Just because you can see into every head doesn’t mean you should jump between them too fast.

I’ll illustrate these points using an example from a historical fiction book I’m writing, titled Vengeance at Stone Creek.

Camp Arroyo, Colorado, was one of ten wartime incarceration centers for Japanese Americans. It baked under the sun as it had every afternoon.

Children played. Mothers folded laundry. A sentry cleaned his rifle in the guard tower.

And then: the shots.

Tak Fujiyama was seven years old when he saw his friend Seito San collapse into the dust.

Everyone saw. No one stopped it. Sumiko, his mother, was already sprinting towards the commotion. The kitchen crew froze mid-prep, couldn’t scream. The guard, Pfc. Joe Darrow said nothing. He brushed the shell casings off the tower floor as if he were brushing crumbs from a table.

That moment changed everyone.

What About Dialogue?

In third-person omniscient, dialogue works the same way as other third-person perspectives:

“I’ll get you!” Tak screamed at Private Darrow, dusting the snow off his oversize Army coat. He hadn’t heard gunshots before and was shaken up by the whole ordeal
Darrow didn’t answer. He was wondering if he’d lose rank after the shooting incident.

The narrator, meanwhile, knew what Tak and Darrow were thinking.

You can also add asides or commentary that no character would know, which gives the narrator that wise, slightly smug quality:

Sumiko was exhausted from running from the barracks. She wasn’t quite sure what had happened. She walked closer and was overwhelmed with what she saw.

The Show-Don’t-Tell Balance

Third-person omniscient gives you ultimate show/tell control. Want to show emotion? Zoom into a character’s thoughts. Want to tell us something about the world? Zoom out and narrate. Just make sure the shifts feel intentional, not chaotic.

This is the storyteller voice of classic literature (think Dickens or Tolstoy) and some modern epics. It’s panoramic, wise, and capable of zooming in or out at will.

Third-person omniscient narration gives readers access to collective memory. It allows us to hear not just what happens, but what’s felt. All at once, the story pulls back the curtain on silence, shame, complicity, and courage.

Tak’s disbelief lives beside Darrow’s detachment. Sumiko’s heartbreak collides with her son’s helplessness. Even the wind plays a role, carrying the sound across camp like a cruel messenger.

This perspective doesn’t dilute the pain, it amplifies it. When the reader knows what everyone knows, and still nothing stops the tragedy, the horror is total.

Truth Wrapped in Fiction

Tak’s story is fictional, but the bullets, the towers, and the silence are real. More than 120,000 Japanese Americans were forcibly removed from their homes during World War II. Most had committed no crime. Many were children, and some, like those at Camp Arroyo, never came home.

By using third-person omniscient narration, Vengeance at Stone Creek invites readers not to choose sides. Readers can see the whole landscape. They can sit in the shoes of the witness, the victim, the perpetrator, and the bystander.

Because when history repeats itself, it’s often because too many people looked away.

Your Role in the Story

You weren’t in the guard tower.
You weren’t holding the rifle.
You are here now, reading, remembering, deciding what comes next. The story isn’t just told from Tak’s point of view. That’s the point.

Third-person omniscient lets the reader see the entire moment. It reveals how trauma spreads across a scene like a shock wave. It goes from Seito San falling to Sumiko running and the cook dropping a spoon. It gives the reader access to the full spectrum of awareness, emotion, and silence.

First-person limits us to one set of eyes. Third-person limited creates a one mind boundary. Omniscient opens the sky.

It asks us not only to see, but to understand what was done, what was allowed, and what was ignored.

For Writers: A Call to Experiment

Are you a writer? Try writing a scene using third-person omniscient.
Let us feel not just the protagonist’s heart, but the room’s temperature.
Let us see the villain’s hesitation.
Let us watch a neighbor look away.
Give us the whole truth, not just a character’s version of it.

Third Person Omniscient isn’t just a Point of View. Its lens, conscience, and chorus. Use it wisely. Some stories don’t belong to one person.
They belong to all of us.

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That’s the magic of third-person omniscient. You’re not just in one character’s head. You’re in everyone’s.
– The mother screaming.
– The soldier pretending not to care.
– The cook frozen mid-stir.
– The wind carrying truth through the Japanese internment camp.

In one shot, the whole world reacts, and you, the writer, see it all. 🖊️ Try it: Rewrite a key scene from your story using third-person omniscient.
– Feel the shift in power.
– See what your characters can’t hide.

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A New Dawn at Libby Flats: The longest journeys lead back to yourself

Step into the wide-open skies of Wyoming. Experience the turbulent college days of the 1960s. Embark on a road trip of reckoning in 2006. A New Dawn at Libby Flats by Alan O’Hashi is a sweeping tale. The image is the author in 1967 looking out from Libby Flats in the Medicine Bow National Forest.

This multigenerational story explores love, loss, rebellion, and reconciliation. It bridges the past and present. This novel features vivid landscapes and unforgettable characters. It asks: what occurs when long-buried secrets resurface? How does one handle a decades-old promise that demands to be kept?

Elizabeth Steiner embarks on a 2006 road trip. She travels from New Orleans to Boulder. Her goal is to reconcile with her dying mother, Becca. At Becca’s funeral, Elizabeth realizes she must resolve the differences between her father, Gary.

She must also tackle issues with his estranged university friends, Jack and Avery. They reunite after 38 years to fulfill a long-forgotten pact. This coming-of-age story explores themes of love, identity, and rebellion. It also examines the enduring power of friendship. The characters navigate their shared history and rediscover old bonds.

The story is captivating. It is a tale of a love triangle. The narrative presents conflicts around race and gender identity. It also explores youthful rebellion and the enduring power of friendship. In the 1960s, Becca Pembroke travels for a summer job on the Quiver Mountain Ranch near Lander, Wyoming. She is fleeing her stodgy New Jersey lifestyle. This includes wealthy and egotistical Jack Middleton, whom her mother thinks is Becca’s perfect match.

While in Wyoming, she befriends Gary, the ranch owner’s son. Gary is more interested in fighting in the Vietnam War than in pursuing girls. The two work with another hand, Avery Meadows, from Jackson.

Becca establishes in-state residency. She studies anthropology at the University of Wyoming (UW) in Laramie. She pursues a lifelong interest in returning ceremonial artifacts to Native American tribes. This leads to significant personal revelations that affect her family.

Avery joins her at UW as a wildlife management major. They reunite with Gary upon his honorable discharge from the U.S. Navy. He enrolls at UW to study journalism rather than returning home to manage his family ranch.

Becca’s mother persuades Jack to transfer from Princeton University to UW. His mission is to rescue Becca from the free-spirited Wild West. She shows more interest in Gary, causing a big rift with Jack, in which Avery constantly mediates. Becca creates a Pact among herself and her three acquaintances to keep the peace. A big blow-up between Jack and Gary estranges the group.

Gary and Becca eventually marry and have a daughter, Elizabeth. Thirty-eight years later, in 2006, Becca passed away at the Blue Sky Village cohousing community in Boulder, Colorado. Elizabeth reluctantly returns home to Boulder for her mother’s funeral.

See through the eyes of Elizabeth, Gary, Avery, and Jack. Fulfill Becca’s Pact at Libby Flats near Laramie. Navigate their individual origin stories and life memories. This includes their shared time in Wyoming and their reunion in Boulder.

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